He woke up, it was still dark , the chill penetrated his body . Sat on the floor. Washed his unshaven face and gulped from the bottle.
Time to go back, he got his back pack ready, tightened shoestring. Next journey , this may be the last, he was wandering for last few years , but now realized there are something to do , somebody is waiting for him. Sand crushed under his shoes. Long way to the nearest town, wanted to catch the first vehicle, and return early as possible.
[It may continue....]
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2 comments:
Kripal,
The element of mystery in this first post sets a great tone and makes the reader want to know more.
Another interesting aspect was the way you chose to continue different, yet parallel, trains of thoughts in the same sentence separated by commas, not periods. Instead of four small broken thoughts, the picture emerges as a series of continuous faces of the same idea.
Also loved the way the post ends with "it may continue"... the element of mystery remains even in the closing.
Good work! Will wait for another post. Keep writing :)
May the skies be blue,
May the sunshine follow you
yeah.... keep going
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